Throughout your first Kiai, you rarely give a break. (however I may be proven wrong here)
02:22:855 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11,12) - could be changed, it doesn't really fit the song
03:43:735 (196) - this slider could be extended, hitting this without knowing how to roll (especially for newer players) would be extremely hard, however this may be personal opinion